[ Personal Critique Thread ]

Am I doing it wrong? Did I suspend reality (and characterization) a little too much, even for Poly?

I'm not the perfect roleplayer, and I've never claimed to be, but I would like to do the best that I can so that everyone can have the best experience possible.

In light of that, a critique thread! Feel free to use it. Comments are screened, so really, say what you want, however you want, and so forth.

Wuv. ♥

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Is it possible to sleep through an entire week?

Because I think I did just that.

...although I remember getting up to eat. I think. Or I must have, 'cause I'm not hungry now.

What a waste of a week. Tulio, why didn't you wake me up?


[ooc; Was struck by extreme sloth in the Mirror City, and has now woken up, with no knowledge that Mirror City ever existed. Adventurous girl doesn't take well to idling.]

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You know what? If yesterday was anything close to what war is like?

I want none of it. You hear me? Hell, a girl can love adventure without wanting a missile shoved up her ass.

...so, uh. Given that looking at the Network seemed like kind of a pointless idea yesterday while avoiding all of the fire-happy citizens, I hope no one's terribly hurt? Or, at least, no one I'm very close to. I'm no medic, but I have a basic knowledge of first aid and am relatively familiar with herbal remedies.

Although. I guess. There are probably people from other worlds far more proficient than myself.


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I don't really think this is necessary, since we share an apartment, but I had a feeling you'd feel left out if I didn't mention you here. I'm worried about you too.

And you didn't hear me say that.

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--plan, plan, yes, we get the point, Tulio. Even if I don't recall you complaining in the slightest when we were heading away from El Dorado. But since when has having a plan and a map really gotten you anywhere?

Besides, this place doesn't look so bad, really; surely, you and Miguel must've had a harder time navigating the jungle without much of a guide. At least here, there's clearly some kind of settlement, and there are people--

--wait, where are we?